Analysis of Five Midnights by Ann Dávila Cardinal (ch 4)

Marisol stopped, closed her eyes, and took a deep but shaky breath. The thumping had started inside her skull, like something was trying to get out. Last time it had gotten this bad she’d woken up in the psych ward after a two-day blackout. She’d woken up to find out that her brother was dead.

Few things here, Marisol seems like a danger to herself and others. Especially, if she blacked out for two days. I’m already not a fan of how her mental health is portrayed like she’s about to have an enormous unprompted episode in the middle of the street.

But, but, but – WHY does magic have to make sense?

I love this article because I feel the same way. Magic is magic and drowning it in rules seems to take the fun away. But it’s important to remember that it’s not about the rules, it’s about the logic. So, while you have fun with it, those consequences can build up and make a big boom at the climax of your novel.

Analysis of Five Midnights by Ann Dávila Cardinal (ch 3)

He should have stayed in touch with Vico. Maybe he could have helped, made him talk to Padre Sebastian.
I like the voice here. It’s very smooth and feels human. The small list statement at the end here is what makes it feel close to Javier’s point of view and less like a narrator.